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Okay, so i have this Essay question that asks "HOw did religion shape the colonial development of the New England and Chesapeake Regions" and this is what i put

New England- The “Puritans” left England and cut off all ties with the Church of England. Upon arrival at New England the Puritans all agreed to abide by the laws of their leaders. This was called the Mayflower Compact. The Puritans of New England lived strict lives. They didn’t desire gold or wealth but a personal relationship with God. Religion was a part of everyday life and believed all sins should and would be punished. They worked hard and were expected to hide their emotions of opinions. For example: Roger Williams was kicked out because he voiced his opinion about Separation of Church and State. Puritans believed the Devil was real and those who sinned followed Satan. These Satan followers were considered witches and was punishable by death (the first woman to be accused of witchcraft was Tituba.)
The colony of Salem in New England had an episode of so called “witch craft”. It began when a few teenager girls listened to Tituba (an Indian slave) tell voodoo stories. The girls began shouting barking and twitching for no reason. The towns Dr. figured the girls had been bewitched. They told on Tituba and the colony panicked. Tituba confessed but also accused many others. These events led to what is called the “Salem Witch Hunt”

Chesapeake- These colonies were quite different. They were much more relaxed, especially about religion. Chesapeake colonies looked at wealth and gold as more important than religion. Anglicanism were people who believed in being more conservative, rational, and formal in their forms of worship, the tended to “stress collective rituals over personal religious experience” Due to spread out population and lack of clergy’s most. Clergy’s became known to be addicted to drinking, gambling, and fox hunting. This was known as or called “sporting parsons.”
Rich Angelic plantations owners would say for others’ passage in return for a few years of free work. Not all went to the New World. Voluntarily, some kids were taken by the London Underworld in the middle of the night and forced upon a waited ship. This eventually led to Slavery.

*U DONT HAVE TO READ ALL THAT!!!!!!!!! But i got a 77 ??? Anything i could add? my teacher said :confused: "You should begin with an introductory paragraph and follow it with at least 3 full paragraphs supporting your thesis. The conclusion should be the final paragraph" But i don't understand what i didn't do??
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