We have a DBQ Essay on the development of the Chesapeake region and the New England region up to the 1700's. Why did they develop into different societies?

Here is my thesis paragraph.

Since the founding of the first settlement in the New World (Jamestown in 1607), the Chesapeake region and the New England region, both developed quite differently. New England would develop into a society more focused on long term development and successful future, socially, economically and politically. However the Chesapeake region was founded by settlers who were looking for a quick gain and to leave and therefore did not share the same ideals as the New England region, and would therefore develop a slower economy, a less socially stable society and differed greatly from a political standpoint.

Any advice, I am really bad with this part of the essay which always drags my grade down. All help is appreciated!