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I just realized what it is. you cant say they got them back, they never had them to begin w.

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Oh man, umm...

Let's see: Most women were viewed as being less in most religions - Puritans and QUakers.. they basically stayed home and cooked for the men and all while the men worked ... umm, they weren't allowed to do as much stuff as men..

Nothing specific, sorry :(

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PS: I revised it, is this better?

Quote:However, by 1750 the colonists had developed a sturdy sense of unity and identity as Americans due to various economic, political, social, and spiritual events that generated a thrust for independence throughout the colonies which would then result in American’s regaining the values they once hoped to have.

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much better. a very well structured intro if i may say so. do you have rebuttal paragraph(s) as well? alot of ppl forget to write them.

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Thanks, couldn't have done it w/o your help.

Gimme an example of one for this essay, since I'm not really sure of what you mean by the rebbutal argument.

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the thesis cant restate the question in any way, it has to ANSWER the question. restating makes it seem like you don't know what ur talking about. here's mine:

Colonial unity built itself upon many reasons, such as the Great Awakening which 'Americanized' religion for the first time, the Albany Congress which was the first political show of unity (followed by Stamp Act Congress), and the French and Indian War made Americans realize they can expand without British help.

It's a bit wordy, but I hope it helps =]

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rebuttal are paragraphs where you baiscly say what people are goign to say to prove you wrong and why they are wrong to say it.

example: The colonists had unity is your statement
rebutal could be even though rebellions caused some disunity in the colonies as a whole tehy were unified because....

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in response to gopunchrocks... what advanced vocabulary? btw u can't use sturdy as a synonym for strong- a sturdy sense of unity... that makes it sound like a stable sense of unity... grammatically speaking- u cannot use due to & i honestly don't think it was a thrust of independence...

armando, here's how i would have improved ur thesis:
From 1750 to the start of the American Revolution, colonists developed a strong sense of unity and identity as Americans as they came together to revolt against British oppression, untimately affecting the development of the American government, its economy, and its people.

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Yo, you could have just told me that on msn.

Thanks though :P

I think I like both.

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For the thesis could you rewrite it like:

From 1750 until the start of the Revolution, the colonists developed a strong sense of unity and identity as Americans to revolt against British rule. That sense of unity greatly changed the history of the united States because it was the indirect cause of the Revolution revolt.

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